Can I suggest TT a rewording of the paragraph -
“The company has a truly exciting future ahead. But the only way we will get to see its potential realised and be part of that future is to reject the takeover offer from Pfizer. Only then will we retain ownership of this company. Only then will we be a part of this journey.”
To become -
“The company has a truly exciting future ahead. But the only way we will continue to be part of that future and be fully involved with the realisation of its great potential is to reject the takeover offer from Pfizer. Only then will we retain our ownership of this company. Only then will we continue to be a full part of this journey.”
This rewording gives an emphasis to the fact that we are actually giving something up that we currently hold. It also helps to avoid, in the second sentence, an immediate cognitive response from a reader that the company will still have a future, even though it would be with Pfizer.
poorinvestor
NO-Vote support statement - draft 3, page-18
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