I don't like itIt's too verbose: by the time you reach the end...

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    I don't like it

    It's too verbose: by the time you reach the end you have forgotten what was said at the start. You have to concentrate too hard and it does not stay in your mind.
    Three quarters of the second paragraph should be culled.

    From a critic.
 
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