Wow, a very good song exberliner. The words and message are fantastic - very well written. I'm not an expert, but I reckon the tune itself needs a bit more polish - it's good with that upbeat guitar interest in the middle, but it took me by surprise - maybe blend it in somehow. I like a song to have a variety of tempos - that's what I'd work on.
It has a lot of merit. A song producer could make a hit out of it I would imagine.
All the best!
